Synopsis:

This is now a better paced and more to the point Star Wars film. Distracting plot elements and unnecessary scenes were removed, resulting in an over 40 minutes shorter version.

Intentions:

To create a better paced and more to the point Star Wars film.

Change List:

- No “we’re making our approach to coruscant.” right after he says that, we can see they are making their approach to coruscant. - No dialogue from Typho before the explosion on the Senator’s ship. - Padme reacts faster to her handmaiden dying. There seems to be a lot of strange pauses and weird pacing in the dialogue throughout the film, so I minimized it across the board wherever I could. - Shortened Anakin and Obi-Wan in the elevator. - Jar Jar greeting Obi and Ani is gone. - “Grown more beautiful…for a senator…” that’s all gone. I decided not to have any of the heroes be bumbling idiots. - Anakin doesn’t talk back to Obi-Wan. - We don’t see Jango until he shoots Zam Wessel. - “I don’t think she liked the idea of me watching her sleep” is gone. As are any instances of Anakin being a creeper. - There’s an odd pause between Anakin jumping on the bed and cutting up the slugs and Padme waking up. This is now shortened. - “are you alright, m’lady?” is gone. We now just see her entourage run into the room after Anakin leaves. - Loads of cuts to the coruscant chase. No straight down drive, no power couplings, Anakin doesn’t jump down 400 stories to land on the target car, Anakin doesn’t lose his lightsaber. - Obi-Wan no longer feels that Anakin will be the death of him. I’m not certain, but I’m pretty sure Obi-Wan Kenobi has not seen A New Hope. - Wessel never gets out “It was a bounty hunter called…” Jango shoots her before she can even start. - I lovingly borrowed the “Kamino System” voice over from Attack of the Phantom. - Removed the awkward Palpatine scene. I like the idea that Palpatine and Anakin get close during the clone wars and ROTS, not in this film. It’s never mentioned again anyway. - “Don’t look at me that way. It makes me feel uncomfortable” is gone. Anakin, stop being such a creeper! - No Dex, no Yoda and the Younglings. - Used the deleted scene of Mace and Obi-Wan in the hanger, with some slight omissions. - Removed Anakin and Padme walking with their bags, talking about Naboo. Also removed the meeting with the Queen. - Kept the first half of the waterfall scene. Not the part where Anakin rides that weird thing, but there’s some nice Anakin/Padme bonding in the first part. - Then go straight to the dinner scene where Anakin cuts the fruit for Padme. Again, it’s some really nice bonding stuff between them. - Removed any instance where Padme and Anakin confess their love to each other and explain the predicament they’re having. We’ve already set up that Anakin and her cannot be together, we don’t need a reminder every 10 minutes. – Added back in the scenes at Padme’s house and with her family, with some small cuts. - Heavily trimmed the Jango/Obi-Wan fight. - Anakin and Padme kiss on the balcony, but she doesn’t pull away. This way it is set up that they are more or less together, but Anakin instead has to focus on finding his mother. It also explains why she wants to go with him. The rest of the scenes in the movie up until the arena fight have a different feel to them because of this change. - No Jango/Obi space battle. It makes Obi-Wan look like a moron. - Trimmed the scene with Watto on Tattooine. - Cut lots of little dialogue bits at the Lars homestead. - Anakin’s mothers dialogue has been cut to the bare minimum. - Jar Jar no longer suggests Palpatine gets emergency powers, it is discussed in Palpatine’s office, then we follow Windu show up at the senate just in time to see it happen. By the way, Jar Jar has one line in this film. - The conveyor belt sequence is highly edited. The droids never get off the ship. No Super Mario “run, jump, duck, jump” sequences. Padme is dropped out of that giant cauldron by the Geonosians so they can capture her. Anakin doesn’t jump to different conveyor belts, simplifying the geography of the sequence. - Padme just says “I love you” and they kiss before going into the arena. Short, sweet and effective. - The creature fight in the arena is also heavily trimmed. - The jedi attack has 3PO and R2 completely removed, and also some slight trims to improve flow. - I removed the shot of Boba holding Jango’s helmet. I like it, but due to my other cuts it didn’t really fit nicely, and isn’t crucial to the film. - Some little trims to the battle for flow and pacing. - Removed that terrible shot of Christopher Lee on the obvious green screen speeder bike. - Padme doesn’t order the Clone trooper to find a ship. He asks her if she’s ok, and she says “uh huh” and stands up. - NO YODA LIGHTSABER FIGHT! Yoda doesn’t even come to the hanger that Dooku is in. He chops off Anakin’s arm, Padme and the Clones arrive, he flies away. You seriously wouldn’t miss it if you didn’t know it was supposed to be there, backing up my claim that Yoda fighting is completely unnecessary and stupid in both films. - I removed Obi-Wan’s line about whether the Jedi think Dooku was right about a Sith Lord controlling the senate. That’s like the third time somebody has dismissed that idea, and it starts to make the Jedi seem a bit stupid and incompetent. - Various small cuts.

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