Synopsis:

"Noble intentions can have dire consequences" Jedi master Sol learns after 16 years that his old padawan Osha, who left the order, might be involved, without even her knowing, in a plot of revenge. When a jedi is killed by an unknown and fierce young warrior, he starts to investigate the murder case with Osha. Unfortunately, his past catches up with him, with dire consequences.

Intentions:

I watched The Acolyte, very uneasy, filled with many awkward moments and a plot stretched thin over too many episodes (short) and with too many fillers (useless dialogue, repetitive informations, and so on). But, there were also many great things adding to the lore. It is the era of the professional fan fiction or what I call the pro-fan-sional era. As an editor, director, lecturer in cinema, I just couldn’t sit down and let it go by under my nose without doing nothing. I took on to myself to make a fanfix! To fix the storytelling by rearranging the continuity, mainly. Because I think, besides all the politics and the modern ideology that gets in the way of good storytelling, that the main problem of The Acolyte is the pacing and the editing, we could also blame the format, to which Disney seems to thinks that telling SW stories through TV series is still a good idea (Skeleton Crew, and so on until…)... Disney is literally milking down a beloved franchise, desacralizing it, ... My humble opinion. What I propose here - and I know there is a lot out there -, is a recut of the series into a 165 feature film with master Jedi Sol’s point of view in mind. I would like to prove my point stated earlier: the bad pacing and bad editing is what mainly plague The Acolyte.

Change List:

Preliminary list: In short, I played with the continuity, in order to keep Sol as the main protagonist. - Lucasfilm logo added, with “A long time ago, in galaxy far…” - The alien at the gate when May arrives, cut - “Yes my child”. cut - “Attack me Jedi”. cut - The alien trying to draw his weapon and the table pushed, cut - for rhythm purposes - “I have an unidentified force user”, cut - it adds nothing to the plot - “A Jedi doesn’t draw her weapon unless prepare to kill”, cut … It should come from the Jedi to lower her weapon - The short sequence when Mae throw her knife to the bar owner is entirely edited… When the knife is stopped just in time by Indara, we can hear the knife hitting her off screen, pull out camera… the knife drops on the bar… Camera pulls out from Indara and we see the knife in her chest… Her saber turns off and drops, and she drop her knee on the floor - Title - different soundtrack - 16 years earlier - Flashback from Sol POV - Metal detector cut down to the minimum - The discussion around the camp fire is cut down… “you must eat padawan”, cut - The encounter with the twins under the tree with Sol watching is intercut with both flashback episodes - Minor cuts here and there when Sol spies on them in the fortress - The speeder bikes in the forest to reach the fortress are cut, keeping the mystery as to when the are going to arrive during the ceremony - Many scenes from the twins POV were cut: when they come back tho the fortress and spice cream… when they are preparing for the ceremony, the discussion with their mother in their room - The idea is to keep Sol POV as much as possible… Because he is the one bringing the audience to knowing the twins. - The ceremony was cut down - Example “The power of one the power of two…” sings by the witches is cut entirely! - Sol presenting his Jedi weapon to Osha is cut - Continuity here is altered: Wide shot - then we are in the Jedi ship - the “lying planned” scenes before is cut, we learn it through the Jedi and during the test, and it is confirmed later. - When Sol speaks to Osha, we see Indara acting uneasy, and looking at her padawan Torbin, looking uneasy too… - After the test, Osha passes it, … She gets out of the ship and Mae understand Osha didn’t lie (Show don’t tell!) - Then next scene, Osha confess she didn’t lie because she wants to become a Jedi… - The touching scene between the Mother is cut down a little, keeping the emotion and the impact of Osha decision on her mother… - We learn the M count is high… then cut just after Corbin line “This is it” … - Mother Korril incite Mae to act, with violence, in order to stop Osha from leaving. Which she does immediately after, burning Osha’s drawing book and locking her sister in their room. - We see the Jedi ship hovering over the fortress… Koril confirms to Mother Aniseya she prefers to die before letting her children go… - Sol and Torbin arrives. Sol draws his light saber and prepares to strike Mother Aniseya now transforming into a cloud myst with Mae… Cut just before the lightsaber hit Aniseya… To keep the mystery… - 16 years later - Sol teaches to young padawan - The introduction scene with Osha as mechnek is cut - remember that I’m keeping Sol POV to emphasize his guilt “maybe”? (Plus Yord introduction is cringe… with his Star trekky padawan - also cut). …… TO BE CONTINUED